Some people think that all teenagers should be required to do unpaid work in their free time to help the local community. They believe this would benefit both the individual teenager and society as a whole. Do you agree or disagree?

Teenagers required to participate in social work
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internal to, not outside; located in the bounds of
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community
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the community
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good idea
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a good idea
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because as a teenager everyone will have some free
time which
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time, which
is not occupied with their regular activities, they have to use
this
time to work
with in
internal to, not outside; located in the bounds of
within
local community
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the local community
without pay.
Firstly they
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Firstly, they
will communicate with different people while working and they will get to know different experiences which will be helpful for their future in solving problems, Once they starts working in teams they will understand how they need to behave to be a good team player because being a good team player is important in every career
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Teenagers will understand the work culture and ethics while working in different environments and different people.
Secondly they
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Secondly, they
will understand the importance of the money how
their
people in general
they
parent earning to
fulfill
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fulfil
teenagers wish
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however there
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However, there
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are few disadvantages in
this
, teenagers may impact by the people who are really not in
correct direction
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the correct direction
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it is important to be taken care
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I strongly agree, that teenagers must involve in social service activity
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