Topic: Some people think that men are naturally more competitive than women. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
The human race has been created in
such
a way where
men feel more competitive than Correct word choice
that
the
women. Correct article usage
apply
This
is a well known
fact, since the start of the world. I tend more towards the side where the women definitely make more effort to compete. I would agree slightly with the above topic. Add a hyphen
well-known
However
, In this
essay
we shall discuss why a few people would beg to differ and some may agree with the statement.
Even now humans are of the opinion that Add a comma
essay,
the
men are naturally more eager to win in any given scenario. Most of the freedom fighters have always been men, whether Correct article usage
apply
the
Hitler or Mahatma Gandhi. They had the urge to win over the intruders and became victorious. In the field of corporate, as we move up the ladder 90 Correct article usage
apply
percent
of the top management are the Change the spelling
per cent
self proclaimed
stronger sex. They have a greater amount of ego. In a game of Add a hyphen
self-proclaimed
a
mere chess, he would hate losing to the woman. Remove the article
apply
This
is how a man has been brought up in this
world that you are superior than
the opposite sex and you cannot lose. Change the preposition
to
For example
, the kind of domestic violence that happens in the country is only because he cannot see his lady does
better than him in any way. He tries to control her. Wrong verb form
doing
Finally
, this
has been the plight in many countries and looks like now things are changing for the better where
even Correct word choice
and
woman
are coming up as a natural competitor.
Fix the agreement mistake
women
On the other hand
, she need not be naturally ferocious. As they are inherently built so strong by the creator. They are coming up in all the fields, whether in the field of sports or even establishing
businesses. They are everywhere from acting to directing to going to space to leading the country. Change the form of the verb
established
Furthermore
, they led
by example and are emotionally more stable. Being recognized on par with a man has been the biggest accomplishment for the opposite sex.
Wrong verb form
lead
To conclude
, we are in the world of equals. In context to the question, I would agree by saying it comes
very easy for a man to be competitive as it's in their genes. I would Verb problem
is
also
say that yes, we woman
are not far behind and are in fact Fix the agreement mistake
women
are
more superior human beings.Unnecessary verb
apply
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task response
Ensure that your essay clearly states your position on the given topic. Provide a clear thesis statement and use topic sentences to support your main points throughout the essay.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay displays a clear overall structure with an introduction and conclusion. However, work on improving the connections between sentences and paragraphs to enhance the overall coherence and cohesion.
Word Count
IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.
A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.
Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.
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