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THE RECENT POPULARITY OF ONLINE SHOPPING WILL RESULT IN THE END OF HIGH STREET SHOPS. TO WHAT EXTENT DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE?

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It is shown in the recent studies that
increasing trend
Suggestion
the increasing trend
 of online shopping will make a significant impact on downtown shopping complexes. I completely disagree that
this
 trend will ever make a significant impact on local shops because the online shopping is an
option
, not the only
option
 to
shop
 and
moreover
, many people want to see and feel the
product
 before buying.
Firstly
, online shopping is one more convenience to buy things. Just like some people prefer home deliveries of their daily needs over going and buying physically due to lack of time. It is not with everyone, some people prefer to go and pick fresh fruits on their own. Online shopping gave us the
option
 to buy what we want to
shop
.
Further
, it is not the case with all the type of products, like expensive items, people prefer to buy those items by going to store.
For example
, people who do not have patience, always prefer to go and buy the
product
, as they feel it is not wise to wait for delivery.
Finally
, some people think that it is always better to feel and see what they are buying. In online shopping one cannot see the
product
, they can only read testimonials and reviews. Which is not always sufficient to judge a
product
 worth buying.
Although
, personally I
also
 believe that sometimes it is very difficult to choose online, due to their vague description and unreliable reviews. When one buys a
product
 from a local
shop
, he can thoroughly check and make a decision,
on the other hand
, in online sometimes it is a painful
first
 wait for the
product
 to arrive and
then
 return after dissatisfaction. To conclude, even though online shopping gave us a good
option
 to
shop
, I believe that it will not outweigh our traditional way of going to the
shop
 and buy the products.

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