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Overpopulation of urban areas has led to numerous problems. Identify one or two serious ones and suggest ways that governments and individuals can tackle these problems.

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It is often argued that many countries have problems of rapidly growing populations in urban areas.
This
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 essay will discuss some issues of overpopulation and solutions that can be taken by people and authorities. The main
problem
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 of overpopulation is lack of accommodation because the amount of people's migration to big cities increasing sharply every day.Big cities have a lot of job opportunities and better standards of life.
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, individuals do not have many places for living and they become the homeless. Another issue with what large towns have to deal
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 days is
traffic
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 jams which leads to air pollution
problem
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.
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, there are some solutions that governments could take to deal with accomodation
problem
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.
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 of all, if authorities build more buildings and expand some areas, people will afford places to live.
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, to handle the
traffic
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 jam
problem
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, the government could construct more highways and roads to reduce
traffic
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 and improve public transportation in a better way,
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 as turn on air conditioners in summer and heating in winter.
On the other hand
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, individuals should
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 play an essential role to deal with these problems. One way to take an action to decrease
traffic
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 is to start using public modes of transport
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 of their private vehicles. The accomodation
problem
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 may be done by sharing flats with other people. To conclude, overpopulation causes some problems
,
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 as
traffic
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 and lack of accommodation, but the most important thing is that both
governments
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government
 and people must take action to combat with these difficulties.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • strain on infrastructure
  • public services
  • overcrowded
  • inadequate healthcare services
  • pressure on educational institutions
  • environmental impact
  • increased pollution
  • waste management
  • destruction of green spaces
  • natural habitats
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