The charts show how tourism to two countries changed over a 50-year period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts show how tourism to two countries changed over a 50-year period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The four pie charts compare the proportions of tourists visited from four different countries
to
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Australia
and
Germany
in the years
of
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1960 and 2010.
Overall
, in the period of
beginning
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,
Europeans
were
the
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dominant in both countries,
while
Asians
were the significant visitors to
Australia
in 2010,
Europeans
remained top in
Germany
after 50 years. In 1960, the most number of visitors to
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Australia
and
Germany
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Europeans
with 53% and 45% respectively.
Britain
people were the
second
highest commuters to
the
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Australia
, with a quarter of
proportion
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, which
exactly
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same
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the same
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as the
USA
travellers in
the
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Germany
.
However
,
Germany
had 20% of the
Britain
tourists,
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%
of
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the
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Asians
. The
USA
people and
Asians
were the least significant in
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to
the
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Australia
, with 12% and 10%. In 2010,
Asians
dominated
by
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all other countries in
Australia
, with 63%,
where
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the Europeans
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Europeans
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percentage sharply declined from 53%to 10%, which was a major drop in
Australia
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tourism. From
Britain
and the
USA
, visitors experienced a fall of 5%.
On the other hand
,
Europeans
decreased to 40% in
Germany
, still remained top among others. It is interesting to note that, the
Asians
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percentage increased from 10% to 25% as compared to the
USA
from 25% to 29%.
Britain
was the low country, only 6% contributed to
the
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German tourism.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words australia, germany, europeans, asians, britain, usa with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.

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