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Somepeoplethinkthatmuseumsandartgalleriesshouldconcentrateontheworksoftheirowncountriesinsteadoftheworksofartfrom otherpartsoftheworld.Towhatextentdoyouagreeordisagree

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It is certain that,
health
 related
problem
 is increasing day by day in the world. In some nation's the average weight
person
 is increasing and their levels of
health
 and fitness are denied I will discuss about
causes
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the causes
 of
problem
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problems
the problem
 and how to solve
issue
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issues
 in forthcoming paragraphs.
To begin
 with, there are many causes of
this
problem
first
 and foremost
,
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,
nowadays,
most
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Most
 people
are totally change
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are totally changing
totally change
are totally changed
have totally changed
 their
life style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
 is the main reason they can prefer eating fast
food
 which is easily available in
market but
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the market, but
the market but
 it is tasty
food
 and it is not hygienic
food
 there are many diseases issue create
such
 as blood pressure, heart beat are soon.
Nextly
, they avoid a home made
food
 and most people is more seating at work in office.
Furthermore
,
yougsters
a young person of either sex
youngsters
 weight is increasing there is no excuse in our body and can feel that unhealthy.
For instance
, a
person
 is from used for vehicles and not used to own foot. On the other side, there are ample ways to solve the
problem
 every
person
 should duty to avoid from
restaurants
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restaurant
food
. And more time
prefer
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prefers
 eating to
home made
made or produced in the home or by yourself
homemade
food
. It's a hygienic
food
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food, however
however
,
person
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the person
a person
 is eating
this
food
healthily
Suggestion
healthy
 life style in our country.
Furthermore
, the
person
 is more and more excise joined in their life. After, eating a special
diet
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diet, such
such
 as meat, fish are
adding
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added
on
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to
 our diet.
moreover
in addition
Moreover
,
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,
the government
arrange
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arranges
health
 related awareness camp start in our cities because of,
person
 is say and
health
 more knowledge about them. Before wrapping it up
,
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,
itwould
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it would
 be
noexaggeration
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no exaggeration
 to state that various factors led
this
 ugly
growth but
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growth, but
 it is a not
hard but
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hard, but
 to
crack
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crack, however
however
, the joint efforts of parents and school is mandatory to uproot get ride from society.
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