These days many families move abroad for work. Some people believe that this benefits the children in these families. Others believe that it makes their lives more difficult. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Nowadays, an increasing number of families
relocate
Suggestion
have relocated
to another country to start a means of livelihood.
Although
some people think that it offer great advantages to the children of these homes, others say that it add untold hardship to the children. In my opinion, I believe that
this
trend is beneficial to the children. The reasons for both views will be discussed in the following paragraphs. There are certain reasons why some people believe that
parent
's who move their families outside their home country because of work will make life unbearable for their offspring. One common reason is that these children will experience culture shock because they are exposed to a strange culture
that is
different from the one they were used to. Another reason why they believe that the children suffer from their parents' decision to change abode to another nation to work is that it takes time for them to adapt to the changes
such
as a new school, house and friends.
This
put
Suggestion
puts
unnecessary pressure on them as they need to survive in their new environment within a short period.
For example
, a recent survey on children of immigrants enrolled in primary school in Nigeria revealed that most of them get overwhelmed with the rising changes in their environment.
This
makes them withdraw into their space and if not adequately managed, they become introverts.
On the other hand
, there are compelling reasons why I believe that children enjoy more benefits when they relocate with their
parent
to another country to source for a living.
Firstly
, they have the privilege of learning a new language and way of life.
This
helps them to understand the diversity of life and develop their social skills.
For instance
, psychologists believe that the brain of a child develops and process information rapidly.
This
ability helps them to acclimatise to a new place faster than their
parent
.
Secondly
, it helps them to have a logical thinking about issues they might encounter simply because they have been exposed to various kinds of people and understand how to deal with individual temperaments,
overtime
Suggestion
over time
. In conclusion, despite varying opinions of people on the effect of
parent
changing places
as a result
of work
on
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with
their children, I believe that the fact that it is an opportunity for their wards to learn about the culture of other places and the development of their psyche makes it advantageous to them.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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