You have planned to study in Australia. You have sent a letter to a college, but you have not received a reply from college. Write a letter to the college principal. In your letter, - you should give details of the course that you wished to do, - say why do you choose to study at the college, - say why you need the reply soon.
Dear Sir,
I am writing
this
letter to you to enquire about the admission criteria for overseas students. I also
wrote you a letter last
month, but I did not get a reply from your officials.
To embark
with, I am interested in doing a Master’s in Public Health which is a Verb problem
begin
one year
course with Add a hyphen
one-year
thesis
. Because I Correct article usage
a thesis
have
completed my graduation in Unnecessary verb
apply
medicines
in 2016, I thought that it Fix the agreement mistake
medicine
is
the most appropriate course to start a Wrong verb form
was
carrier
as a researcher.
What is more, I Correct your spelling
career
choose
Wrong verb form
chose
this
college
because this
is the world's 5th ranked
university producing thousands of competent graduates every year, who are working all over the world. Add a hyphen
5th-ranked
In addition
, I am also
told by my cousin, who is an ex-student of the college
, that professors are very devoted, loyal and faithful to their profession, and college
provides Correct article usage
the college
state of the art
facilities to their students.
Add a hyphen
state-of-the-art
As another
university in the town is offering me admission in the same course, but I Change preposition
Another
will
prefer your Wrong verb form
would
college
to pursue my further
studies. Therefore
, If I am not eligible for admission, then
I would not waste my academic year, as their deadline is approaching. I would like to request you kindly let me know at the earliest.
I look forward to hearing from you soon.
Yours faithfully,
Maryam KhanUnauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
coherence cohesion
The logical structure of the letter is well-organized overall, but the greeting and closing could be improved for a more appropriate and professional tone.
task achievement
The response is complete and relevant to the task, with a suitable writing tone. However, the greeting and closing could be revised to better match the formality of the letter.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite
