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The Internet will never replace traditional course books in schools.’ How far do you agree with this prediction?

#internet #course #books #schools #prediction
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Is
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 a replacement for traditional
course
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 books
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this
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 essay I would like to express my opinion whether
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internet
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the internet
 is a replacement for traditional
course
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 books in schools Necessity is
mother
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the mother
 of all inventions and
internet
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 is one of the most important tools
that is
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 invented by human beings in the modern times that has transformed our lives in many ways. Google search is the most popular search engine used on
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internet
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the internet
 for people to ask
questions be
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questions, be
 it
address
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the address
 of a location, timings of different countries
,
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,
 currency conversions etc.,
with
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With
advancement
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the advancement
 of
internet
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 people has considered
internet
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 as a source for obtaining answers ranging from simple tasks to learning rocket science. Similar to an old proverb "All that glitters is not gold " all the answers that are shown on the
internet
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 are not true and reliable.It is true that
internet
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 has drastically improved and eased way of
living but
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living, but
 at the same
time users
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time, users
 should
also
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 be cautious not to believe all information found on
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internet
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the internet
 unless it is verified in some form. Students in
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 current generation are staring to use
internet
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 from an early age as computer education is being taught as an academic subject across various
countries countries
a politically organized body of people under a single government
countries
 across the globe with developed countries leading the way. One of the primary uses of the
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 for students from primary school to graduate school is to search for
course
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 content related to specific subjects that would help
student
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the student
a student
 in resolving or assist in completion of assignment tasks
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,
this
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 is adopted by not all students but a majority of students as it would help them to save time
instead
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 of going through academic
course
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 books. Academic
course
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 books have a lot of content
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 required for a student to thoroughly understand a particular subject and would help them to learn and explore new things which is essential to
learning process
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the learning process
.
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Similarly academic
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Similarly, academic
Similar academic
Similar Similar academic
course
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 books are written by experts after a significant amount of research and always are based on facts which makes them more reliable.
Internet
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 has a vast amount of information than
a
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an
 academic
course
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work but
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work, but
 it has its own challenges on
reliability
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the reliability
 of information being fed In
summary I
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summary, I
 strongly agree that
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Internet
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the Internet
 cannot be a replacement for academic
course
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works but
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works, but
 it should
also
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 be noted that
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Internet
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the Internet
 has
man
a quantifier that can be used with count nouns and is often preceded by 'as' or 'too' or 'so' or 'that'; amounting to a large but indefinite number
many
 other advantages which can be used for various purposes and should be used with caution when using it for a learning purpose.

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