The crime rate among teenagers has increased dramatically in many countries . Discuss some possible reasons for this increase and suggest solutions.

It is true that there has been a rapid growth in the criminal acts among youths in many countries. There can be
variety
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a variety
of reasons and steps can be taken to address it. In my opinion, there can be three major causes of unlawful acts among adolescents.
Firstly
, modern day parents
does not pay
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do not pay
close attention to their young ones. They permit them to do whatever they like and failed to instill discipline, which allows these youths to be easily influenced and controlled by peer pressure.
Secondly
, in many countries, to get
quality education
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a quality education
is very expensive and not affordable for everyone,
this
causes the high rate of school drop outs and it is said that an idle mind is a devil’s playground.
Finally
, in developing countries,
government lay
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government, lay
down bad examples for these innocent youths, because they see them engage in different atrocities
such
as bribery,
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vote
manipulation, embezzlement
etc
continuing in the same way
etc.
without being held accountable for their actions.
This
motivates the youths to
also
engage in criminal acts hoping they won’t be crucified for their actions.
Crime rate
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The crime rate
can certainly be curbed. I believe that the change must start with the parents, who need to understand the importance of training a child and set firm rules for their teenagers and discipline every unlawful
acts
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act
.
Also
, education need not be expensive, if
possible it
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possible, it
should be free for all.
This
will encourage more youths to get educated and
therefore
change their mindset towards punishable
offenses
a lack of politeness; a failure to show regard for others; wounding the feelings or others
offence
. At the same time government should lead by examples and stop involving in unlawful acts.
Also
, they should always implement the punishment due for all law offenders,
this
will instill fear in these young minds and make them desist from bad
behaviors
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
. In conclusion, some countries will continue to record increased rate in crime among adolescents, unless Parents set new rules, education becomes affordable if not free and governments start implementing due actions to law offenders.
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