In recent years, there has been a considerable rise in crimes committed by young people in cities. what has caused this ? what solutions can you suggest ?
A noticeable upsurge in the number of juvenile delinquencies has been observed recently and the emerging concept of nuclear families
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, both parents are busy, increased socioeconomic stress and the impact of recreational activities being adapted in the modern world are some of the underlying factors to be blamed for this
state. It is the need of hour
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problem.
These days, people prefer to live in nuclear families in which the children live with their parents only. Such
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both parents toil from dawn to dusk to fulfil the material requirements of their children and themselves and Accept space
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wrong, thus
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they get into wrong doings
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the number of illegal acts among teenagers was quite low. This
still holds true for certain countries like Pakistan where
the concept of joint families is still alive to some extent.
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Pakistan, where
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attributable to the present day increase in teenager offences is the present day popularity of certain video games and programmes. A recent recent divulged the fact that certain video games such
as IGI and PUBG ,
that are based on violence, have a significant effect on the neurological activities of the brain and these tend to tempt the children towards violent activities, which, intern, increase the delinquency rates among the very same people when they grow up a bit.
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extremely important problem, individuals need to pay keen attention towards the brought of their children. No wonder, fulfilling material needs of their children is important
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where these children will be given utmost care is important. The government needs to step forward in building up these facilities and should Accept space
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ban such
means of recreation like video games which can increase violence.Submitted by kh.sara96 on
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