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More and more people are buying ready to eat food instead of cooking themselves. Does this development has more advantages or more disadvantages.

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Man through the ages, from a period
one
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 can hunt for a
food
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 to the present
time
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. When
one
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 can buy a preprocessed
food
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 in restaurant/Small shops some people say nowadays we can prepare
food
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 easily without putting lots of effort with the help of preprocessed items and technology when compare to olden days, other people think that consumption of preprocessed brings a
lot
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 of disadvantages for human health so they prepare for freshly cooking
food
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. In my view we do have an advantages and disadvantages of both options so I’ll analysis, both options and present my opinion in following paragraphs. From
one
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 side, Preprocessed
food
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 brings lots of benefits to the human beings and society.
Firstly
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,
one
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 can save lots of
time
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 with the help of preprocessed
food
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 and
one
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 cannot spend his
time
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 in the kitchen for peeling and cutting of vegetables, washing, cooking and preparation of various kinds of dishes.
One
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 can spend his
time
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 with his loved ones, exercise and walking with friendly dogs.
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, we can
taste
put to the test, as for its quality, or give experimental use to
test
 out a
lot
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 of varieties of items without spending much
time
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 with the help of modern technology and
also
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 we can use microwaves to prepare the
food
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 in short span of
time
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in addition
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 to that
one
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 has capability of spending money there would be an option to visit the restaurant where a person can enjoy various
variety
Suggestion
varieties
 of items like Mexican and American extra with good service and
one
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 can enjoy
food
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 by sitting in a nice environment and get relaxation. From the other side
,
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,
 some people think that preprocessed
food
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 is not good for health because of ingredients/chemicals that are used to keep the items of preprocessed
food
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.
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Unfortunately
,
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,
 we’re seeing
negative aspects
Suggestion
the negative aspects
 of eating of preprocessed foods in newspaper and
television
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television, moreover
moreover
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 health experts are alerting us to go for cooking rather than preprocessed items and they advise us to cook when we’ve a sufficient
time
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.
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 In conclusion
,
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,
cooking is a great tradition and brings
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lot
Suggestion
a lot
lots
 of
relax
Suggestion
relaxing
 ion for the people more over helps to come out from
pressure
Suggestion
the pressure
 and we can
spent
Suggestion
spend
time
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 with loved ones and helps to come out daily activities
.
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Every person has own scale of thinking I can say based on
one
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’s
time
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 availability financial condition they have to decide option either cooking or proposed foods
.
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finally we
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Finally, we
Finally we
can’t forgot
Suggestion
can’t forget
 cooking and do not abuse/avoid the proposed foods
.
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 Please
note I
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’ve to develop in spelling – auto corrected
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lot
Suggestion
lots
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