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Some parents believe that a child should not vest time by reading intertaimats book, instant they should spend time to read education book only

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Several parents confided that reading
intertaimat
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 book is not
need
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needed
 to
child
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.
Is
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 think that
instead
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 of it reading education book is more useful for
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child
Suggestion
children
a child
. On the one hand,
this
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 point of view true. If
child
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 we're
vest
Suggestion
vested
 his time to more reading a
fairytale
Suggestion
fairy tale
 he would be understand the essence of
live
Suggestion
life
on
Suggestion
in
 a fantastic and imaginative way. He would
adopt
make fit for, or change to suit a new purpose
adapt
 to it and become helpless in the face of pressing issue in life.
On the other hand
Linking Words
, it is not true to for
it
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 children from reading
fairytales
Suggestion
fairy tales
. Because,
firstly
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 reading
scents books
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scents, books
 on a regular basis is boring and it seems
difficulty
Suggestion
difficult
. The
child
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 brain is
tried
depleted of strength or energy
tired
 and fence of reading many great books.
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Secondly the main
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Secondly, the main
 idea of
fairytale
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a fairytale
the fairytale
are
Suggestion
is
 goodness, and we often find a good and bad reputation in skirts. The
child
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 can distinguish between good and bad. In the course of reading
fairytale
Suggestion
fairy tale
, positive heroins appear in the eyes and is
strive
Suggestion
striving
 to be like them
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