Today, the life expectancy of people is much higher than before. Some people think that older people should continue to be involved in workforce. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, everyone
want
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wants
their life is much easier than before.
some
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Some
people believe that elderly people should continue to be involved in the workforce. I partially agree with
this
statement and I will explain my views in the upcoming paragraphs.
To begin
with, there are many reasons of older people should continue to be involved in the workforce. The
first
and the foremost is old people can do jobs because some elderly people like to do work in their free time.
Moreover
, older people
plays
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play
an important role in jobs because they can judge the.
Youngers
knowledge and they face many challenges in their life. So, they have more
experineced
having experience; having knowledge or skill from observation or participation
experienced
people as well as they take a right decision for any work because they observed more experience.
Therefore
, they do not make mistakes in taking a decision as compared to
youngers
used of the younger of two persons of the same name especially used to distinguish a son from his father
younger
.
For example
,
mostly
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most
business organized by
oldish
people
such
as MDH species business is composed by
oldish
person and
this
business is famous in
whole world
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the whole world
.
On the other hand
, there are some demerits of older people involved in the workforce. The
first
and the foremost is
oldish
people take some rest in their home because mostly elderly people suffer from some
heath
a healthy state of wellbeing free from disease
health
problems like stress, physical problems and
many
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much
more. In additional to
this
,
government
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the government
allocate
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allocates
a pension system for
oldish
people. So, older people do not look for jobs they can easily stay in their homes and enjoy life with their families. But, some elderly people have
responsibility
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the responsibility
responsibilities
of their families so in some situation
oldish
people can do
jobs
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the jobs
. To conclude, jobs are important to everyone. Government
should be encourage
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should encourage
should be encouraged
businesses to create a more jobs which
is besed
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are based
is based
is best
is blessed
on younger and elder people.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • life expectancy
  • workforce
  • mentorship
  • mental and physical health
  • community engagement
  • rapidly changing work environments
  • economic stability
  • age discrimination
  • workplace adjustments
  • financial strain
  • pension systems
  • diversifying
  • creativity
  • problem-solving
  • retirement norms
  • flexible working hours
  • part-time positions
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