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Demand for food is increasing worldwide. What is the cause of this? What measures can the international community take to meet this demand?

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In recent times, there has been a huge rise in the demand for
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 across countries. While some underdeveloped nations have reported loss of lives due to
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 starvation, some developed ones have concerns about
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 storage. Fortunately,
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, there are solutions to deal with these problems. The major causes for the increase in
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 demand are population explosion and
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wastage
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. In spite of the economy being low in countries like Africa, there has been an exponential increase in manpower.
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 of
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 production cannot meet its demand,
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, leading to serious issues like starvation.
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, in countries where is economy is very sound there are issues pertaining to
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wastage
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 due to unavailability of advanced machinery for
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 storage.
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The international food council
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 council can solve for the scarcity in economically backward countries by increasing the production through modern farming methods. India,
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, has made its
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 production rise northwards by 15% by adapting to advanced farming technologies. In developed countries where the
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 of
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 is high, initiatives should be taken to develop machinery that stores
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 for longer periods. To illustrate an example, recently the United States and Russia together developed an efficient process that allows
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 to be preserved for up to 20 days thereby bringing down the
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 by 20%. To conclude, there has been a drastic increase in
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 globally due to population explosion and
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wastage
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. Thankfully, there are ways to solve it through technology and better farming techniques.

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