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‘Failure is proof that the desire wasn’t strong enough’ To what extent do you agree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Everyone has undergone through difficult changes and experienced ups and downs in his or her
life
. It is undoubtedly a normal trend in our
life
.
However
, I do not entirely agree that failure is dependent only on someone’s insufficient wish to succeed in a specific area. It does not seem unreasonable to suggest that during the evaluation of
this
 situation many factors should be counted.
Firstly
,
life
 circumstances in which are people. Someone,
for instance
, may have set a goal to launch a business but unexpectedly got married.
This
 case is understandable and does not deserve any blame. One may prefer making a family while another would rather continue going straight forward to his or her dream. It is an individual choice based on personal preferences and
life
 principles.
On the other hand
, I agree that failure means the person was not goal-driven and self-disciplined enough.
This
 relates to many
cases including
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cases, including
 a well-known problem with obesity. If a person has decided to lose a certain amount of
weight than
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weight, then
weight then
 no obstacles should stop him. He does not have to give any easy or make excuses. In fact, if his goal is not achieved,
as a result
, he will not prove to himself he is strong and motivated human being. It means his wish was not powerful enough. The famous and great people of history have tried many things over and over again and there were lots of
experiment
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experiments
 that were not successful. The failure is not the key measurement of the determination and effort put towards accomplishing something. One could draw the conclusion that everything depends on the individual. A human being may accomplish tremendous results as proof of indescribably powerful motivation or end up without
completing fully
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fully completing
 his task.

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