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The digram above shows how a solar powered water pump works. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons relevant.

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Nowadays
alot
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a lot
 of countries
uses
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use
are using
solar
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solar systems
the solar system
system
. The diagram shows how the
water
 pumped by using the solar power. The solar powered
water
 pump starts by underground bore or well,
water
 level bore pump until the ground level it goes to the
water
 tank and the DC power from
panel
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the panel
panels
. All of
this
 comes from the
photovoltaic
 cells
accures
come to pass
occurs
 from the sun. Comparing
this
 feature by the normal
water
 pump without using the solar
system
have
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has
 advantages and disadvantages. The disadvantages are it cost
alot
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a lot
 for these materials, if the geographical weather of any country has
alot
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a lot
 of fug and cloudy weather the production of
this
system
 will be less than normal. In conclusion,
solar
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the solar system
system
 is an excellent
system
 to be
used whether
Accept comma addition
used, whether
 in houses, companies, streets, etc. When deciding
in
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on
 having a solar powered pump we must list the pros and cons to have the right decision.
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