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It is often said that the government spend too much money on the projects to protect wildlife, while there are other problem that are more important. To what extent do you agree or disagree

#government #money #projects #wildlife
Government has a fixed budget and the allocation of the amount has to be done sensibly. Allocating large amount of money
on
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for
 the protection of wildlife is unnecessary overlooking the other major issues which are or much importance. I considerably disagree with
this
 statement. Wildlife is an extremely important part of human life, to protect and conserve it for the society and for the future generation is
governments responsibility
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the government's responsibility
government's responsibility
.
Firstly
, conserving wild animals and plants will generate tourism for the country which ultimately leads to higher revenue and economic growth. Another point into consideration is that the future generation is yet to see the wildlife which exist, some species have already vanished and some are
at
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on
 the verge
to
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of
extinct
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extinction
. Allocation of
considerate amount
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the considerate amount
 of money for the wildlife is justified. Education and
healthcare
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health care
 are other
most important
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more important
 issues for the government to concern. Learning sector improvement will
also
 raise the employment rate and gradually helps in the growth of the country.
However
, another major issue is
healthcare
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health care
 which
require
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requires
 more attention, funding the
healthcare
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health care
 system and proving the latest machines and new medicines is the need of an hour. For people instance, Higher rate of
cancers which
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cancers, which
 require different treatments at various levels. Government
also
 needs to take into
camsiderations
the process of giving careful thought to something
consideration
 these aspects of the society. In conclusion, government
have
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has
 a better understanding of how to allocate the funds. Wildlife
preservense
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preserves
is
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are
 of more importance than the other aspects of the society.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Wildlife conservation
  • Biodiversity
  • Ecosystem
  • Human welfare
  • Poverty alleviation
  • Resource allocation
  • Cost-benefit analysis
  • Non-governmental organizations (NGOs)
  • Ecotourism
  • Sustainable development
  • Preservation
  • Endangered species
  • Habitat destruction
  • Climate change
  • Environmental stewardship
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