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Today, in modern society, fast food is growing and playing an important role in daily life. Many people think it has many benefits, but other don’t agree. Let’s consider what are the advantages and disadvantages of convenience food.

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There are many reasons why people choose to buy fast
food
.
First
 of all, there’s no doubt about it, fast
food
 is cheap so that they can save a lot of money to do other things. Because of that, it is the most common meal choice of lower class folks.
Moreover
, the
second
 most obvious reason is fast like definition.
Food
 is prepared in minutes and they can leave without waiting for a long time.
Finally
, there are
more healthy
Suggestion
healthier
 choices at fast
food
 stores or restaurants than before. Many places can provide them with various options on the menu so they can
oder
(often plural) a command given by a superior (e.g., a military or law enforcement officer) that must be obeyed
order
food
 according to their own nutrition chart.
For instance
, Burger King’s Grilled Chicken Sandwich without mayonnaise gives them 360 calories, 7g of fat, and 26g of protein. It’s good for health and provides enough energy to work. It seems to confirm the idea that convenience
food
has
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had
 many disadvantages in the past couple of decades. There are three main
unfavorable
not encouraging or approving or pleasing
unfavourable
 can take a look at it. The
first
 thing that
need
Suggestion
needs
 to be said that lower quality foods that are usually caused by a large-scale production process. Raw materials are not carefully selected, not fresh and
therefore
 the nutritional content is not preserved.
Second
, fast
food
 has been very fattening. It is usually fried with a lot of oil or added a lot of
sugar so
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sugar, so
 it will have bad affects to the digestion if they eat regularly.
Furthermore
, fast
food
 is not only unbalanced in nutrition but
also
 can have some toxic substances generated during processing that causes some diseases as obesity, hypertension or lack of vitamins.
Taken
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Take-in
 everything into consideration, fast
food
have
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has
 many basic vantage like
save
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to save
 money, save time and
fast but
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fast, but
 it
also
 rings some disadvantages as
affects
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affected
to
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in
 some parts of
body
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the body
, malnutrition.
Although
 fast
food
 is very suitable for
busy life
Suggestion
a busy life
busy lives
, they should consider to choose the delicious, nutritious and hygienic foods to protect their health.
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