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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.

#people #time #loss #species #plants #animals
Environmental problems are harmful effects of human activity on the
environment
. Saving the natural
environment
 is humanity's duty for the
benefits
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 of both, the
environment
 and humans.
According to
 lots of articles about the
environment
 , these days there are some basic issues that human
being
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beings
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 must be worried about and any of them is as important as the others. 1-Climate change 2-Overpopulation 3-Resource depletion 4-Water pollution and other kind of pollution like air and soil 5-Urbanization and developing the cities 6-Loss of
the
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plants and
animals
 are some of these issues.
Although
 there are lots of problems that people must be concerned about and find some
solution
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, I
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 believe losing the species of
plant
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plants
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 and
animals
 is the most important one. I think that plants are insect's food, when plants species disappear because of
the
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climate change which is people's fault, it looks like insects have no food,
then
 insects will be disappeared and after a
while
 some
animals
 that are fed by insects will be gone and it won't have stopped, it will be happening for
other kind
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 of
animals
 and it is a huge modify in a natural
environment
. In fact, humans are changing the life cycle,
unfortunately
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this
changing
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 is a huge damage to humans and the
environment
. In order to solve these problems or at least try to solve them, I can mention that we as human
being
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 are living unsustainably and we are destroying our natural
environment
 which is nonrenewable, so
government
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,
scientist
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scientists
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 and ordinary people must stay on the same side to protect our world.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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