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Some products can be made quickly by a machine. Other items take a long time to be made by hand. As a buyer, which do you prefer and why? Give specific details and examples in your answer.

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Some products can be made quickly by a machine. Other items take a long time to be made by hand. As a buyer, which do you prefer and why? Give specific details and examples in your answer. As the old adage goes men are distributed not by things, but by their views. After the industrial revolution, one of the most controversial debates
is related
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relates
 to acceptance of mass-produced verses handmade goods. I firmly agree that
hand made
made by hand or a hand process
handmade
 goods are more preferable than machine-made products. We shall discuss in the following paragraphs.
To begin
 with, few of
products
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the products
 need extra detailing in that respect handmade products are preferable. Not only that, to maintain quality of product plethora of buyers chosen handmade supplier as it resulted in an attractive and long-lasting item.
For instance
, as per
recent survey
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a recent survey
 of 500 shopkeepers in India, they said 87 percentage of their profit is earned by selling handmade items.
Secondly
,
such
 type of businesses provides
huge amount
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a huge amount
 of employment to artists.
That is
 how employment rate will increase and craftsman gets chance to earn bread and butter for their families. It is gospel truth that handmade products are more environment-friendly and cruelty – free rather than mass-produced products.
For example
, they do not use any machinery so there are fewer chances of air and water pollution.
However
,
such
 detailing work takes lots of time and efforts. The seller has to invest whopping money in
such
 products. Due to the industrial era, some customers prefer machine-made products as it is a cheaper option than handmade. In that scenario, the seller has to lose their investment. To conclude, after scrutinizing both the aspects I agreed that
although
 the handmade practice has a number of disadvantages.
However
, the advantages overweigh demerits.
That is
 the reason why I choose handmade products over mass products as they are available in good quality, durable, and environmentally friendly.
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