Many people believe that media coverage of celebrities is having a negative effect on children. To what extent do you agree?

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With the increase of popularity of celebrities, nowadays, children became more interested in getting to know them. There have been discussions among

people whether

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people, whether

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negative effect

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a negative effect

negative effects

on children. I agree with

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perspective of people for several reasons.

Firstly

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, children started to find the news about

celebrities more

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celebrities, more

compelling than other type of news

as a result

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media

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the media

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today

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today's

children have more knowledge about Justin Bieber than the threat of global warming on

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the environment

. Since they found the

celebrities’

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celebrity

celebrity’s

lifestyle more interesting, they became less aware of the things happening around the world

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as technological innovations.

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is definitely not the future generation that people expected.

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, children started to want to get what celebrities have after seeing it on TV, magazines or

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the Internet

. If parents do not let them have it, they become ungracious.

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a couple months

ago I witnessed my

neighbor’s

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neighbour’s

son getting mad at his father because he did not let him have the chain that his

favorite

something regarded with special favor or liking

favourite

rapper had. He apparently became aware of that accessory after seeing the celebrity on the cover of a magazine.

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, children started to speculate that behaving or dressing like celebrities makes them look attractive. Since they change their

demeanor

(behavioral attributes) the way a person behaves toward other people

demeanour

based on celebrities, they will not be able to develop their personal skills from an actual learning. It is obvious to see

substantial amount

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a substantial amount

of children who dress like celebrities or even talk like them. In terms of developing personal skills, the effect of media covering the celebrities is not beneficial for children. In conclusion, I firmly believe that media coverage of celebrities is negatively affecting children. If we take into consideration of the

behavior

manner of acting or controlling yourself

behaviour

and interest change of children, it is actually not that hard to see that negativity. But do people take adequate initiative regarding

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situation?

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is the real question that people need to think about for the future generation.

Fri Sep 27 2019

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

Celebrity culture
Glamorization
Unrealistic expectations
Self-esteem
Scandals
Role models
Moral development
Mental health
Influence
Exposure
Social media platforms
Charity work
Inappropriate behavior
Perfection image
Negative impact
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