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Increasing travels between countries enable people to learn different cultures or to increase tension between people from different countries?

#countries #people #cultures #tension
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Topic 1: Increasing travels between
countries enable
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countries to enable
 people to learn different cultures or to increase tension between people from different countries? In recent years, globalization has been promoted throughout the globe, accelerating the transnational
travel
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. Many adopt a view that the hostility between locals and visitors will be
fueled
(usually followed by 'with' or used as a combining form) generously supplied with
filled
filed
failed
 when there is an upsurge in new arrivals;
however
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, to the best of my knowledge, the mutual understanding and tolerance is the main interest of international
travel
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 which overshadows the disadvantages.
Firstly
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, it is important to recognize that
newcomers
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the newcomers
 usually show their respect to indigenous cultures,
although
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 they are sometimes conflicting, opposing to their life principles, religious belief, as an old saying indicates “when in Rome, do as
Romans
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the Romans
 do”. Anecdotal evidence shows that frequent interaction and communication between foreigners and inhabitants is a stepping-stone, encouraging them to take the same position on many issues, thereby having goodwill, friendship. A good
case
events that provide the generative force that is the origin of something
cause
 at
this
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 point is wearing the bikini in Western countries, which is a taboo in the Arabian world. Yet, over time they have developed concrete relations when their citizens
travel
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 to each nation and gain mutual comprehension
on
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of
 their problem.
Secondly
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, another justification for traditional
travel
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 is that it opens up opportunities for business activities throughout the world.
As a result
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 of having insights, foreign grasp on local cultures, overseas entrepreneurs are able to take full
advantages
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advantage
 of their experiences, new knowledge to expand their market overseas. Not only does it benefit
foreigners but
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foreigners, but
also
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 helps the natives earn handsome incomes via providing services, material to newcomers.
Therefore
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, the exchange of trust and cultures is promoted increasing the hospitality.
In other words
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,
economic benefits
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the economic benefits
 are another reason that curbs the enmity of foreigners. In conclusion, notwithstanding the divergence on social
backgrounds or
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backgrounds, or
 cultural values, international
travel
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 does not intensify the tension between ethnic
groups but
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groups, but
 strengthens the bonds in economic and brings mutual understanding.
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