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Government should spend money on railway rather than road. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Governments of any nation, have several responsibilities to give the quality of life to their citizens
such
 as a good educational system, a reliable medical system and great transportation facilities. Whether an authority should spend funds on railways or roads, is a debatable issue among people.
However
, I firmly believe that both roads and railways are equally maintained, as both are equally preferred by citizens.
To begin
 with, the use of personal vehicles is increasing day by day as it provides people round the clock mobility, comfort and flexibility and roads are the option solely to use the private auto-mobiles.
Further
, roads are the easiest option to reach the nearest place. Local people commute via buses, cabs and rickshaws, is the best example.
However
, dilapidated roads are the death traps. If roads are not constructed and maintained properly, people are likely to meet accidents which can be life threatening.
For instance
, according to a survey, conducted by a local newspaper, the reason of 60% accidents is the lack of maintenance. In spite of having a number of options to move around the country via roads, long journeys are usually preferred via trains and trams. As railways are less busy than roads, people can move rapidly by utilizing railways.
Moreover
, going via trains is more affordable by local people as it has very low fare as compared to buses on roads. But, un-maintained railway tracks are detrimental to passengers as railway accidents are more dangerous and a train has around a thousand people.
For example
, in Mumbai, a local train facilitates over seven hundred people at a time. To conclude, it is the responsibility of governments to give better facilities to citizens by repairing roads and railways, which can be definitely useful for people to save some lives.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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