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Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion

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Throughout history, it has never been so easy to bring people from different cultures together. People from different ages have
also
 had problems understanding each other and getting together.
Music
 is considered as one of the beneficial solutions which can solve the problem that people from different cultures and ages have in gathering together. By my reckoning,
music
 by not belonging to
certain group
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a certain group
certain groups
 of people is the remedy to
mentioned
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mention
problem
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the problem
. Whether as an audience or as a player most of the time
music
 makes people do some group activities.
Although
 some genres appeal to a certain group of people,
others
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others, such
such
 as pop or jazz are accepted by many people from different cultures or age groups. In concert revenues, it can be seen that people, regardless of their ages or cultures stand or sit
next
 to each other and enjoy the
music
 they love.
Similarly in
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Similarly, in
music
 bands
also
 usually there either an age limit nor any restrictions for people from different cultures to join the band. In some
cases composers
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cases, composers
 even fuse the kinds of
music
 from different cultures which most of times the players of the songs are the ones who belong to those cultures.
For example
, The Silent City is a
music
 track which includes Iranian traditional instrument Kamanche and
also
 other western instruments
such
 violin, cello and etc.
However
, in some cultures, musicians prefer to keep their
music pure
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music, pure
 and do not combine any other foreign musical instruments with their traditional
music
. To conclude, by considering
music
 as an activity
that is
 done in groups most of the time, it can be a beneficial way to bring people together regardless of what they believe or do or what age they are at.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • evoke
  • connect
  • diverse audiences
  • cultural exchange
  • generational gaps
  • shared experiences
  • unifying force
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