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Some people say that economic growth is the only way to end world poverty and hunger. Others say that economic growth is causing damage to the environment and should be stopped now. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Economic growth is the key to everything. But once you have economic growth, it is important that we reach out to people who live in the shadows, the people who don't seem to ever think that they get a fair deal. It
is argue
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is argued
argues
 that a poverty can stop when the economy will be
go
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going
 up while some people believe that when it grown that mean to destroy the
environment
. In the following paragraph, I will discuss both of these viewpoints before a conclusion is reached. Economic growth is the most powerful instrument for reducing poverty and improving the quality of life in developing countries.
For example
, when
increase
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the increase
 of the manufacture in countries that means it
also
 give opportunities for people to get a job.
Moreover
, when they have more money that can increase a livelihood and
also
 decline of a difficulty of life.
Additionally
, they are delightful of soul.
On the other hand
, when the
economic
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economy
 is developing steadily that means the
environment
 has
also
 decreased.
For
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To
 illustrate, If the manufacturing would like to build up or expand the company
for
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to
 increase in a commercial sector, there may be deforestation occurring.
Then
, it
also
 decreases a richness of forest so it is a reason for
destroy
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destroys
 ecology.
Therefore
, while the economy is developing, it may have an impact on the
environment
,
ecosystem
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the ecosystem
 as well. After having discussed the most pertinent points, I feel that the only logical conclusion is that while economic development may offer a better life and might be ending of poverty but
also
 offer the destruction of
environment
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the environment
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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