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Computers are being used more and more in education. Some people say that this is a positive trend, while others argue that it is leading to negative consequences. Discuss both sides of this argument and then give your own opinion.

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Computers are being widely used in all aspects of the life. They are commonly used in the education sector, while some people see as a positive trend and the rest see as a negative trend.
This
 essay will discuss both the sides of an argument and it will provide evidence that use of computers has a positive impact. Now-a-days, generation is far ahead and no kid is willing to carry a huge amount of weight
in
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on
 their shoulders. Systems are more knowledgeable, than books. Practical experience is more important and still being a book worm won’t help in any way. With the use of computers, the kid visualises many things and gets a clear idea of how things work. They
also
 tend to develop own interest towards learning, by doing all
this
 memory power
also
 increases to a certain extent. As an illustration, in olden times kids had feared to go to school and they were pushed without any interest,
this
 fear was created just because of their teachers. Now-a-days to have a happy schooling tablet are introduced, which has virtual teacher to guide them and they tend to stand on their own.
However
, the other side is the most dangerous one. Kids forget communication and they
also
 spoil their eyes, by continuously peeping into it. They cultivate stage fear inside them, as the amount of communication between people is reduced. Human interaction is rapidly declining. To give a clear example, while we attend a wedding or any other family functions, they feel shy even to greet others, they do not talk with each other, due to loneliness they end up getting engaged
to
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in
smart world
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the smart world
. In conclusion, computers are widely used in the education sector and they are very helpful in gaining practical experience, but used in
proper way
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the proper way
 will produce
good
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the best
 result. When overused, the child gets involved
into
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in
 it and tend to forget the rest of the world.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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