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Some people say that parents should decide on what kind of medical care their children should receive, while others believe that this is the state’s responsibility Discuss both views and give your opinion

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 almost everyone agrees about the necessity to provide children with the best
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, there is some dispute about whether parents or the government should decide what that
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 is. My own view is that while governments may adopt a general policy for children’s medical
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, parents should normally have the ultimate say. There are good grounds for arguing that the state should decide on the form of medical provision for children. One of these is that typically the state is better able to make informed decisions because it has access to all the latest medical research. Another is that occasionally there are epidemics in schools and it is the responsibility of the government to ensure that illnesses should not be spread unnecessarily. In
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 case, it might justifiably order compulsory vaccination.
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 is a very strong argument for allowing parents to decide on what
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 their children receive.
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 is because one extremely important principle is that everyone should have the right to choose what
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 they receive. For children who are too young to make their own choice, it is only natural that their parents should make that decision for them.
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 is particularly important for families that come from a culture where certain medical interventions
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 as blood transfusions are forbidden. In
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 case, it seems quite wrong for the government to order something that may go against religious beliefs. In conclusion, I do accept that there are good reasons for the state to outline what
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 children should receive, but parents should be able to have the
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 word particularly when religious principles are at stake.
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