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The graph below shows the sales of children’s books, adult fiction and educational books between 2002 and 2006 in one country.

The graph below shows the sales of children’s books, adult fiction and educational books between 2002 and 2006 in one country.
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The line graph compares the number of
sales
 of three different types of
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the book
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book
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books
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 from 2002 to 2006, measured in
million
dollars
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.
Overall
,
in
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it
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 can be seen that children's
book
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books
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sawed
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 a significant
increased
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 in
sales
 throughout the given
period
,
whlie
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while
 other types showed a
flutuation
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fluctuation
 in
its
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their
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 profits. Looking
into
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 the graph in more
details
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detail
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, we can see that in 2002, Adult fiction were around 45
million
sales
, in
comparsion
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comparison
 with children's
book
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books
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 and education books which showed lesser numbers, well over 30
million
 and well under 30
million
 respectively.
Childern's
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Children's
 books rose
considrebly
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considerably
 by 10
million
 in the
next
 year, and
than
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then
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gradully
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gradually
 went up to reach its peak, at approximately 55
million
. The figure for Adult fiction apart from a slight rose between 2003 and 2004, was
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 through the
period
 shown, to finish at almost 30
million
. The figure for Education books showed a
period
 of fluctuation throw the 4-year
period
 compared with
other
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the other
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 two
book
sales
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, book, million, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
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