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Some people claim that there are more disadvantages of the car than its advantages. Do you agree or disagree? Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of having a car.

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There is no doubt that these
days owning
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days, owning
 a
car
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has become
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 more worldwide. The question is, do the advantages of owning a vehicle outweigh its disadvantages? In
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 essay, I am going to explore the pros and cons of using a private
car
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 for transportation and try to draw some conclusions
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 In terms of
pros
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, having a
car
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 facilitates your transportations
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 The main reason given to support
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 claim is that you don’t have to wait for buses or trains as well as you don’t have to comply in their timetable and routes.
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, it saves the time.
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,
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-owners feel more comfortable and freedom as they can take their family members with them and other necessary goods.
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, various drawbacks may be noted.
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, the number of cars is increasing
now a days
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nowadays
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 which causes traffic jam and pollution.
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, private cars are the main reason for congestion on the roads and the increasing environmental pollution.
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, private cars require a garage and parking place, which may be absent in some destinations
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Furthermore
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, owning a
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 is very expensive.
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 is including but not limiting to the price of the
car
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, the cost of the tax, insurance cost, fuel cost,
car
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 repairing and maintenance
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 In conclusion,
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 some people prefer to use their
car
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 for
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 as they feel more comfortable, others chose to use the public transportation.
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 I believe that the disadvantages are greater significance than the advantages in terms of traffic jam, money spending, and parking.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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