in the modern world it is possible to shop,work and communicate with people via internet and live without any face to face with others. is it a positive or negative development?

the

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The

past few decades have witnessed the

development

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of internet-based communication

Accept space

shopping and work through website without any direct interaction with

human

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humans

a human

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has several benefits and several disadvantages on the effect of human's life.

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the one hand, the

development

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of internet services can be a good sign.

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first

preceding all others in time or space or degree

First

of all, as workers and consumers the internet will help them to save a huge amount of time.

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particular, they can do online shopping to buy their daily needs

instead

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of going to a mall or supermarket which makes them become more efficient.

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furthermore

in addition

Furthermore

, it can help

prople

(plural) any group of human beings (men or women or children) collectively

people

to connect with every person from a different country.

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will help them to improve their social relationships with different cultures and different languages.

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thus

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Thus

, it will make them more

socialable

capable of being scaled; possible to scale

scalable

and get more opportunity to learn some new cultures and languages.

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the other hand,

although

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there are several positive

aspect

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aspects

, there are

also

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a few drawbacks of having less face to face with others.

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firstly

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Firstly

, people who buy stuff through the online app likely to get stuff

that is

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different from the picture and lead to the

dissatisfication

the feeling of being displeased and discontent

dissatisfaction

more over

in addition

Moreover

More over

, the relationship through online can cause

variety

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a variety

of social problems.

people

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People

who

makes

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make

have made

friends through the social media are not genuine.

the

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The

obvious evidence

that is

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that the media carries many horror stories that shows many youngsters fallen as pray and to paedophiles

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conclusion, the

development

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of internet in term of shopping, working and communicating can help people

makes

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make

friends, learns something new.

to a very great extent or degree

refers to the speaker or writer

personally think that it is a positive

development

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that

a unit of length equal to one twelfth of a foot

this

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modern era

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in the modern world it is possible to shop,work and communicate with people via internet and live without any face to face with others. is it a positive or negative development?

‘It is always wrong to keep animals in captivity, for instance in zoos’. How far do you share this view?

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Plastic shopping bags contribute to the pollution of land and sea. Some people think they should be banned. Do you agree or disagree? and what can be done to reduce it?

Some people think the government should support artists like painters, musicians, and poets, while others believe this wastes money. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays we see an increase in social problems involving teenagers. Many people believe that it is because parents spend more time at work and less with their children. Do you agree or disagree?