In some countries, young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.

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In some countries adolescences

are prefer

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are preferring

prefer

are preferred

work

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or to go aboard for a period between finishing high school and commencing

university

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educations. Sometimes

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situation

have

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has

advantages as well as disadvantages. In

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I will discuss both views and come to a final conclusion.

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, we have to choose a

field we

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field, we

prefer before starting

university

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studies.

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furthermore in

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birth-hood some people think to be

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engineers

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engineer

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that

case before

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case, before

entering to

university

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studies, going to a

work

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in that field will be an added advantage for their higher

education

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. Most of the time in

universities we

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universities, we

can gain only theoretical

parts but

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parts, but

after completing

degree

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a degree

and working in a field may be

stuff

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stuffed

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Moreover before

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appearing to higher

education

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young people should encourage to

work

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or travel for

year

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a year

years

so they can identify the real situation. In

further

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it will help them to take correct decision to choose their higher

education

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Secondly

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this

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period

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also help

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also helps

them to get the idea about the

society

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. In schools they were limited to same kind of age limits students

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only, but

if they

work

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or travel after finishing high school and before commencing their

university

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education

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, they can

meetup different

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meet up with different

meet up different

experiences with various types of people, cultures, attitudes

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and cultures etc.

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as same as advantages there are disadvantages too. In their student life they have less responsibilities and duties to

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do, but

when they released

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into

society

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, they have to face more responsibilities and duties. Sometimes

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may feel them more stress

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home sickness, isolating problems from families and friends or fear to face

society

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at once. In

conclusion by

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conclusion, by

encouraging young people to

work

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or travel between starting universities and finishing high school, will help them to build their future pathway successfully.

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Moreover, it

is help

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has helped

their to get

general idea

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a general idea

the general idea

of the

society

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too

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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307 words

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In some countries, young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.

Fully explain your ideas

Some people claim that not enough of the waste from homes is recycled. They say that the only way to increase recycling is for governments to make it a legal requirement. To what extent do you think laws are needed to make people recycle more of their waste?

Many young children have unsupervised access to the internet and are using the internet to socialize with others. What problems do children face when going online without parental supervision? How can these problems be solved?

You have been working in a company for three years, but now wish to leaving job. Write a letter to the manager of the company. In your letter: • What have you learned while working for the company • Did you enjoyed working there • What are your reasons for leaving the job

Governments should not have to provide care or financial support for elderly people because it is the responsibility of each person to prepare for retirement and support him or herself. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Bullying is a big problem in many schools. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.