The line graph below shows the number of annual visits to Australia by overseas residents. The table below gives information on the country of origin where the visitors came from. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information given.

This
line graph presents the
number
of visits to
Australia
by foreign citizens per year
while
the table specifies the visits per country that took place in the year 1975 and 2005. There has been a gradual increase from 1975 to 1985
while
the
number
doubled from 1984 to 1995 as seen on the chart.
However
, compared to 1975, in 2005 the
number
of foreign
visitors
has increased drastically (Total 8.8 in 1975; 30.4 in 2005).
Furthermore
, an interesting fact is that among the six
countries
given, South Korea and Japan had the most
number
of foreign
visitors
to
Australia
in 2005 compared to 1975 (South Korea: 2.9 in 1975 and 9.1 in 2005; Japan: 3.2 in 1975 and 12.0 in 2005). Meanwhile, China having had 0.3 million people visiting
Australia
in 1975 but 0.8 million in 2005 which is quite less in terms of changes that took place over the years compared to other
countries
over the past years.
Overall
, compared to 1975 the
number
of foreign
visitors
has been increasing, reaching quite a high
number
of
visitors
of 32 million to
Australia
while
having a majority of
visitors
from South Korea and Japan.
On the other hand
, the least
number
of travels was from China but it is safe to say that the majority of the visits to
Australia
were from Asian
countries
than Western
countries
.
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