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Some people consider price as the most important thing to think about when buying products (such as cell phone) or service (e.g. medical treatment.) Do you agree or disagree?

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It is thought by some that
price
 is the most important factor to consider while making
purchase
Suggestion
purchases
 of products and services
such
 as a cell
phone
 or a medical treatment respectively. In my opinion, I feel whether the
price
 is to be regarded as the most important thing or not, depends on the purpose of the facility we want to buy.
Firstly
,
price
 certainly plays a crucial role as a factor to consider, when buying a material
product
such
 as a cell
phone
, which are bought to make calls.
This
 is mainly because, with an increase in
price
,
its
the thing named or in question
it
 features increases. A cheap cell
phone
,
for instance
, comes with a low-quality pixel-camera, while the camera quality improves with a high-end mobile
phone
 costing more. So, the
price
 has to be taken into account while purchasing material products. Another reason why
price
 ought to be considered as the most crucial aspect while buying a
product
 is simply to avoid over-spending on a less worthy
product
.
In other words
, prices for most manufactured products are not fixed and the same
product
 can be bought in/at a cheaper
price
 if bargained,
therefore
, help saving money.
This
,
moreover
, prevents victimization of the customer by fraudulent sellers, who wants to sell the
product
 at an expensive rate.
On the other hand
, when purchasing a service,
such
 as a medical treatment, which could impact health directly,
price
Suggestion
the price
 is certainly not the priority. The reason for
this
 is that life
cannot be put
Suggestion
cannot put
 at stake for the prices of the services, and cheaper medical procedures are, unfortunately, less likely to achieve the best result. In
such
 cases, the quality of the service or
product
 should replace its
price
 as the top priority. To conclude,
although
price
 can be negotiated when considering purchase of material products which have no direct effect on health,
services
Suggestion
service
 affecting life should not be calculated and matched with their costs.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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