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Some people work for the same organisation all their working life.Other think that it is better to work for different prganisations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Everyone is not
iteresting
arousing or holding the attention
interesting
 at a same
palce
a point located with respect to surface features of some region
place
pace
piece
 or a company in their whole life.
whereas
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Whereas
,
Accept space
,
other people assume that it is a wise decision to do
work
Use synonyms
 with variant companies.Indeed
,
Accept space
,
it
depend
Suggestion
depends
 on the person and their needs. As the matter of fact
,
Accept space
,
lots of reasons people do not apply to other
palces
a point located with respect to surface features of some region
places
pieces
.Some are
leasy
moving slowly and gently
lazy
easy
 and sluggish.
However
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,
Accept space
,
other people have not much qualified owing to they left their educational life earlier.As well as most of people are feeling comfortable
to
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with
in
 doing job with
same organisation
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the same organisation
.
they
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They
 have
know
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known
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 s and outs about
Use synonyms
work place
a place where work is done
workplace
 and which type of strategy he\she can apply
on
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for
to
 the any situation regarding their duties.
For instance
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,
Accept space
,
when I was doing
work
Use synonyms
 in a bank.A cashier
,
Accept space
,
who started his professional life from that bank.Now
,
Accept space
,
he is still working at a same place
alongwith
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along with
unchanged designation
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an unchanged designation
 for almost 35 years.But
,
Accept space
,
He can be able to mange cash counter on one
hand even
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hand, even
 during mob of people.Because
,
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,
he has quite experienced
and and
in order to; used instead of "to", especially after try, come, go
and
 can be able to overcome on workload with perfectly and without any hesitation.
On the other hand
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,
Accept space
,
many people specially
oue
of or belonging to us
our
 new generation is always
starve
Suggestion
starving
 for joining new multinational companies.Reason is that
,
Accept space
,
working
at
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on
 the other platform is giving you more chance for learning
also
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 earning more money.Namely
,
Accept space
,
people moved their
work
Use synonyms
 location not only because of
unsatisfication
Suggestion
salary but
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salary, but
also
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 they have
curiosity
Suggestion
a curiosity
 to get more knowledge about their professional field.
Thus
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,
Accept space
,
they changed their job. As far as my best of notion
,
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,
everybody should be flexible to
moulde
form in clay, wax, etc
mould
 him\her self for working with any company.I believe
,
Accept space
,
it is a significant and very beneficial for people who wants handsome pay and boost their confidence too. In conclusion
,
Accept space
,
people should do job over there where they get self
satisfiaction
the contentment one feels when one has fulfilled a desire, need, or expectation
satisfaction
 and have experienced.It is a basal core regarding every employee.

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