Some people think that it is more beneficial to take part in sports which are played in teams, like football, while other people think that taking part in individual sports, like tennis or swimming, is better. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Exercise is a very
usefull
being of use or service
useful
tool for a good health in today
polluated
furnished with inhabitants
populated
polluted
plotted
and fast lifestyle. Sports is a great
execrise
the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
exercise
excuse
for being a healthy person. Some people
thinks
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think
that it's provide an advantage when you take part in sports as a
team
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, as
it's
the thing named or in question
it
its
gives a moral support to each player. In
contrary
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the contrary
, they are many who
thinks
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think
that taking part in individual sports may boost your confidence and other interpersonal skills. In
this
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essay, I will describe both views in detail, and
then
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conclude it with my opinion. On one hand, when people think about sports, they probably
first
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imagine some kind of
team
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sports like, football, cricket etc. They are by far the most popular sports, and we often watch them on TV or other internet forums. As play these kind of sports helps children to
buid
make by combining materials and parts
build
a
mutal
common to or shared by two or more parties
mutual
understanding between them, and
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also they developed a
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they also developed a
helpful nature. There
comminication
the activity of communicating; the activity of conveying information
communication
communications
skills are
also
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going to be improved. These all skills
helps
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help
to serve them well in their professional and personal life's as teenagers and
then
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adults.
On the other hand
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, players of individual sports will not
got
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get
these benefits.
In particular
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, they will get some benefit from their chosen
sports
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sport
. In sports like golf, tennis, people learn valuable lessons. They will learn
determinataion
the act of determining the properties of something, usually by research or calculation
determination
and self-reliance, as well as improve their ability to concentrate for so long, it
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also help
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also helps
has also helped
them to build self-confidence to deal every kind of problem occurs in daily routine.
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, the ability to work as a
team
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is considered the most important and valuable talents in
busniess
a commercial or industrial enterprise and the people who constitute it
business
and in other fields, individual and self-motivation is
also
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a key to success, which is required in a peaceful life. In conclusion, all
sport
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sports
offers different benefits;
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, in my opinion,
sport
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a sport
which
were played
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was played
in
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team
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the team
teams
are probably more useful than those done by individuals because the benefits which they required are
slighty
to a small degree or extent
slightly
more valuable in the wider-world.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cooperation
  • team spirit
  • sense of belonging
  • community
  • leadership
  • trust
  • collective responsibility
  • dependency
  • self-reliance
  • self-discipline
  • goal setting
  • tailored development
  • flexibility
  • social support
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