Some people think that it is more beneficial to take part in sports which are played in teams, like football, while other people think that taking part in individual sports, like tennis or swimming, is better. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Exercise is a very useful tool for a good health in today polluted and fast lifestyle. Sports is a great exercise for being a healthy person. Some people think that it's provide an advantage when you take part in sports as a

team

, as it gives a moral support to each player.

On the contrary

, they are many who think that taking part in individual sports may boost your confidence and other interpersonal skills. In

this

essay, I will describe both views in detail, and

then

conclude it with my opinion. On one hand, when people think about sports, they probably

first

imagine some kind of

team

sports like, football, cricket etc. They are by far the most popular sports, and we often watch them on TV or other internet forums. As play these kind of sports helps children to build a mutual understanding between them, and they

also

developed a helpful nature. There communication skills are

also

going to be improved. These all skills help to serve them well in their professional and personal life's as teenagers and

then

adults.

On the other hand

, players of individual sports will not get these benefits.

In particular

, they will get some benefit from their chosen sport. In sports like golf, tennis, people learn valuable lessons. They will learn determination and self-reliance, as well as improve their ability to concentrate for so long, it

also

helps them to build self-confidence to deal every kind of problem occurs in daily routine.

Although

, the ability to work as a

team

is considered the most important and valuable talents in business and in other fields, individual and self-motivation is

also

a key to success, which is required in a peaceful life. In conclusion, all sports offers different benefits;

however

, in my opinion, sports which was played in the

team

are probably more useful than those done by individuals because the benefits which they required are slightly more valuable in the wider-world.

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Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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9Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

326 words

8.00

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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