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Nowadays in many countries women have full time jobs. Therefore, it is logical to share household tasks evenly between men and women. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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In the early days, men used to
work
 while women spend time in the house doing day to day
work
. With the development of the world, the human need has been expanded due to the high availability of goods and services, which involves money and wealth. So nowadays
both
 husband and wife doing jobs have become compulsory. Traditionally household tasks like cooking, washing garments, taking care of children
were
In or at or to what place
where
 women's tasks while men
work
 for the there family but now it has changed completely. It is so unfair if the female has to
work
 household tasks alone while working full time because working full time is extremely difficult.
example
Suggestion
Example
 performing a full-time job is stress full, after the stress full job doing household
work
 by themselves may lead to the psychological problem.
those
Suggestion
Those
 who perform
both
 will not able to do there
both
 works correctly. In modern-day many general populations consider that men and women shire there works when
both
 are doing jobs, but some still
belives
Suggestion
believe
believes
 women do all the works. Working together is most essential to spend quality family life. Teamwork will build up together working with each other.
Also
, the development of the family depends on hard
work
 and understanding. In conclusion, it is important to share a working load between parties for the development of their children and family. If
both
 party works are to make money, teamwork is import. So it is recommended to
work
both
 off together.
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