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Many people buy new phones or laptops to keep up with the latest technology.Is this a good thing or bad thing?

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Technology
is flourishing
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has been flourishing
 by leaps and bounds every day. Now a
days
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day
, people are getting more and more dependent on machines and gadgets for their work and everyday routines. Mobiles and Laptops have become the basic necessities. It is always debatable whether buying
new laptop
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a new laptop
 or mobile phones to remain updated with the latest technology is actually required or not.
This
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 essay will discuss the pros and cons related to the both aspects. In a competitive world of today, it is very important to stay updated with
latest trends
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the latest trends
 and tools. If you have lesser knowledge of the current market demand, you may
loose
fail to keep or to maintain; cease to have, either physically or in an abstract sense
lose
 your job or business. Obviously, staying up to date needs latest devices as new softwares are sometimes not compatible with old hardware.
For instance
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, most of the applications
now a days
the period of time that is happening now; any continuous stretch of time including the moment of speech
nowadays
 are platform dependent and require specific devices for bug free working.
Moreover
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, old devices sometimes degrade the performance and take more time
,
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,
 in comparison to the latest ones which are quick in response. So buying
new laptop
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a new laptop
 or mobile in
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 scenarios is more of a necessity.
However
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, looking at the other aspect, sometimes people buy new gadgets for showing off to the society. They always want to own the best product which may require them to change their phones and laptops every
year even
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year, even
 if they actually have no need as
such
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. In
such
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 scenarios, old product which is absolutely functional is discarded for no reason and it is
complete wastage
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a complete waste
complete waste
 of resources
,
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 time and money.
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Moreover it
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Moreover, it
 creates more social pressure on people who cannot afford to buy new devices so often. In my opinion, updating the gadget is good when the individual is in real need of the latest product but buying new things just for the sake of society to stay up to date is not at all justified.

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