Tobacco is a kind of drug. People have been free to use it. Some people think that it should be illegal to use it comparing with other drugs. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What is your opinion?

Every year, thousands of people worldwide die from both smoking
tobacco
and involuntarily breathing it in.
Therefore
, I agree that it should be made illegal considering its harms to health. In the following paragraphs, I shall put forth my arguments to support my views. It is irrefutable that
tobacco
products, especially cigarettes, could cause lung cancer, heart disease, and other illnesses. Smoking
tobacco
kills more than alcohol, drug abuse, car crashes, murders, suicides, and fires combined.
World-wide some
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World-wide, some
3 million people die from smoking each year, 1 every 10 seconds. Smokers are more than 20 times more likely to develop lung cancer than non-smokers, and smoking can lead to a host of other health problems, including emphysema and heart disease. The detrimental effects of cigarette smoke are not just on the active smoker, but
also
on the passive smoker. Smoking
tobacco
not only gives the smoker a
high
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higher
chance of an early grave it gives those around him/her the same chances due to
second
hand smoke. What is more, a child born to a woman who has actively or passively smoked during pregnancy has chances of developing congenital defects. Drug abuse
also
has many potentially
harmful effects
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harmful, effects
not only on
individuals but
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individuals, but
also
on family, friends, work and society. Frequent drug users may turn to crime to meet the increasing expense for their habit. Continued drug use may cause personality changes. Some users lose interest in school or work, or have difficulty meeting the responsibilities of a job or family. To put it in a nutshell, I pen
down saying
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down, saying
that, one of the main responsibilities of any government is to ensure the safety of its population,
that is
why taking
tobacco
should be made illegal.
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