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Individuals can improve the environments. Some people say that only governments and large companies can make difference. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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In the
last
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 decades, the
environment
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 has been suffering due to many human and non-human factors. Some people believe that only
goverments
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
governments
 and some large organizations have real ability to enhance the
environment
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 around us.
This
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 essay will
analyze
consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning
analyse
 why governments and large companies are
entierly
to a complete degree or to the full or entire extent
entirely
 the ones who can improve the
environment
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 significantly. It is undeniable that human intervention is one of the most challenging
factor
Suggestion
factors
 in the eco-system balance. As human being
sometimes act
Suggestion
sometimes acts
 recklessly and carelessly despite the unseen the combined risk.
For example
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, a smoker can start a fire without intent by a throwing the little tiny remaining of his
ciggarette
finely ground tobacco wrapped in paper; for smoking
cigarette
cigarettes
.
This
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 example
calrify
Suggestion
clarifies
clarify
 the needs of having institutionalised authorities
such
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 as
governements
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
governments
government
 or large
comapnies
an institution created to conduct business
companies
. They can issue
regulation
Suggestion
regulations
a regulation
 and bylaws to mitigate the adverse impacts of human intervention. Companies as well can apply some work standards
inside
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in
 their workplace to protect the
environemnt
the totality of surrounding conditions
environment
 or reduce the
emmision
the act of emitting; causing to flow forth
emission
emissions
.
For example
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 the can build a point system that
deduct
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deducts
 certain points for any violation
to
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of
 the
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environment
Suggestion
environmental
 standards.
In
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addition governments
Accept comma addition
addition, governments
 and large companies have the power and tools to summon people and make new eco-friendly practices and trends in the society. Overall, a
goverment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
 and large companies can easily prioritize nation's goals towards making the
environement
the totality of surrounding conditions
environment
 cleaner.
However
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, it should not be forgotten
taht
pointing out something
that
 individuals have
also
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impact
Suggestion
impacted
 on the
environement
the totality of surrounding conditions
environment
 There is live evidences from all over the world
taht
pointing out something
that
 individuals can put pressure on governments and large companies to adopt new changes in their policies and strategies to
protest
shield from danger, injury, destruction, or damage
protect
 the
environemnt
the totality of surrounding conditions
environment
. Most of us saw that 16 years old activist who came all the way up from Norway to give a speech at the United Nations summit
last
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 August.
However
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, from
individual's perspective
Suggestion
the individual's perspective
an individual's perspective
, large change could be eventually
acheived
to gain with effort
achieved
 if every individual
adjust
Suggestion
adjusts
 his own daily routine in a sustainable way,
such
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 as using less water.
This
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 essay agreed that the major change can only be accomplished by
goverments
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
governments
 and large companies
becasue
for the reason that; on account of
because
 they can easily take fast and
magnifecent
characterized by grandeur
magnificent
 steps towards the sustainability of our world and our
environemnt
the totality of surrounding conditions
environment
.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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