Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, the purpose of education has changed in Korea. There are some People who think that
competition
in children should be made,
also
others believe that children who are taught to
co-operate
work together on a common enterprise of project
cooperate
as well as become more useful adults. There are advantages and disadvantages for both of the arguments.
To begin
with, what is good if a sense of
competition
m children is made? They could develop themselves more and more as they learn and
study
a lot to win the
competition
. To prove
this
, in Korea, it is popular - even common now - to have a tutor who comes to
student's house
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the student's house
to teach extra pieces of
study
with paying a lot of money. They learn faster than what they learn at school.
Furthermore
, during the vacations, students
study
abroad to learn English for a month
instead
of
revise
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revising
school work. If they have experiments
such
as
study
abroad, it is one of the greatest plus points to go to the famous well-known
high-school
a public secondary school usually including grades 9 through 12
highschool
.
Moreover
, there are four big school exam and two national examinations to test
students' level
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the students' level
of studies. Generally, only the highest 40% can go to the good quaternary high schools and colleges. Children learn as much as they can, to win the
competition
to obtain good quality schools.
On the other hand
, as they are busy to enter the schools and
study
individually with their own tutors, there are problems. They become selfish. They become careless and don't help others a lot if it is about studies. There will be no co-operations for them.
Then
, why are there companies for many people
to work
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work
in? Each of them is clever,
however
, there are weak parts and strong parts for each person. To co-operate is to improve
this
part. People talk and listen to what others thinking of and learn. That could
also
be a great opportunity to learn
instead
of learning
alone
with a forward motion
along
with one teacher. In conclusion, I strongly agree with that children should be taught to
co-operate
work together on a common enterprise of project
cooperate
rather than compete. Nobody is perfect. People learn together, work together to develop each other.
Therefore
, I want parents and teachers to educate children concentrating on co-operation, not compete and ranking them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • encourage
  • compete
  • cooperate
  • useful
  • adults
  • skills
  • motivation
  • drive
  • resilience
  • failure
  • workplace
  • empathy
  • social skills
  • reduce
  • stress
  • pressure
  • balanced
  • approach
  • ideal
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