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Many people make friends through social sites and chat rooms. Others believe that it is not a good idea to make friends without meeting them face to face. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give your own opinion and relevant examples.

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With the advancement of technologies
such
 as smartphones and the Internet, people spend a lot of time on social media. Though some people believe in making friends only after a personal interaction, I strongly support the idea of making friends online since it is not only more convenient but
also
 helps develop friendships with people from diverse backgrounds.
Firstly
, social sites are beneficial for many
people to make
Suggestion
people, make
people make
 new friends not only in one’s own country but
also
 from abroad.
This
 helps in knowing a foreign culture through conversation with friends.
Similarly
, it helps a person who
have has
Suggestion
has
has had
is having
had
 an introvert personality because he does not mix easily with other people when he meets them face to face.
For instance
, these sites provide chat rooms as well as video call or voice call to avoid face-to-face conversations. He can use only messenger or chat room for conversation with a new friend.
Secondly
, nowadays, by making new friends all over the world homemakers are establishing their business worldwide and it helps a lot in becoming financially strong.
For example
, these online websites provide business pages for spreading business
everywhere which
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everywhere, which
 can help not only the businessmen but
also
 in the national economy In conclusion, making friends on social media is an excellent way to network and gain insights about various cultures and countries. It is a convenient way to resolve international and
inter-cultural
Suggestion
intercultural
 conflicts, and create a sustainable society. It is not harmful if we would use some features
such
 as block the person when we feel a threat of some kind.
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