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Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. Discuss this both views and give your opinion.

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Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each
type
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 of
crime
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.
Others
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Others, however
however
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, argue that the circumstances of an individual
crime
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, and the
motivation
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 for committing it, should always be taken into
account
Use synonyms
 when deciding on the
punishment
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. Discuss
this
Linking Words
both
Use synonyms
 views and give your
opinion
Use synonyms
. Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each
type
Use synonyms
 of
crime
Use synonyms
.
Others
Accept comma addition
Others, however
however
Linking Words
, argue that the circumstances of an individual
crime
Use synonyms
, and the
motivation
Use synonyms
 for committing it, should always be taken into
account
Use synonyms
 when deciding on the
punishment
Use synonyms
. Discuss
this
Linking Words
both
Use synonyms
 views and give your
opinion
Use synonyms
.Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each
type
Use synonyms
 of
crime
Use synonyms
.
Others
Accept comma addition
Others, however
however
Linking Words
, argue that the circumstances of an individual
crime
Use synonyms
, and the
motivation
Use synonyms
 for committing it, should always be taken into
account
Use synonyms
 when deciding on the
punishment
Use synonyms
. Discuss
this
Linking Words
both
Use synonyms
 views and give your
opinion
Use synonyms
. Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each
type
Use synonyms
 of
crime
Use synonyms
.
Others
Accept comma addition
Others, however
however
Linking Words
, argue that the circumstances of an individual
crime
Use synonyms
, and the
motivation
Use synonyms
 for committing it, should always be taken into
account
Use synonyms
 when deciding on the
punishment
Use synonyms
. Discuss
this
Linking Words
both
Use synonyms
 views and give your
opinion
Use synonyms
.Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each
type
Use synonyms
 of
crime
Use synonyms
.
Others
Accept comma addition
Others, however
however
Linking Words
, argue that the circumstances of an individual
crime
Use synonyms
, and the
motivation
Use synonyms
 for committing it, should always be taken into
account
Use synonyms
 when deciding on the
punishment
Use synonyms
. Discuss
this
Linking Words
both
Use synonyms
 views and give your
opinion
Use synonyms
. Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each
type
Use synonyms
 of
crime
Use synonyms
.
Others
Accept comma addition
Others, however
however
Linking Words
, argue that the circumstances of an individual
crime
Use synonyms
, and the
motivation
Use synonyms
 for committing it, should always be taken into
account
Use synonyms
 when deciding on the
punishment
Use synonyms
. Discuss
this
Linking Words
both
Use synonyms
 views and give your
opinion
Use synonyms
.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fixed punishments
  • consistency
  • predictability
  • deter crime
  • potential offenders
  • streamline
  • judicial process
  • bias
  • corruption
  • complexity
  • human behavior
  • circumstances
  • justice system
  • intent
  • remorse
  • socio-economic background
  • rehabilitate offenders
  • recidivism rates
  • flexible punishment systems
  • inconsistencies
  • perceived injustices
  • public trust
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