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Some people believe that computers are more a hindrance than a help in today's world. Others feel that they are such indispensable tools that they would not be able to live or work without them. In what ways are computers a hindrance? What is your opinion? You should write at least 250 words. Use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and with relevant evidence.

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The advanced mind machines so called Computer are no doubt the best products of latest technology. One cannot imagine the advancement of life and Sciences without these machines. But like other achievements; they have their own good and bad effects as seen with the experience and passage of time. In my opinion they are good if used for educational and beneficial uses for health and living Etc. Basically twentieth century had been famous for its latest Computer techniques and their application in our lives. Data shown on Computers help us to assess how much education is conducted through
this
 media. The assessment ways as well as examinations are improved.
Moreover
, personal skills of reading and writing are far more improved through Computers.
Moreover
 Science and technology progressed immensely with computers. Researchers like cloning and transplants are only possible with modern computerized skills. Good question comes to one's mind, Where will
this
 Computer would take us
next
? Certainly no one knows! We might explore new planners. May be we will buy houses on Moon, Mars or Jupiter. Or we might lose our own identity. One cannot forget the end of 2000 millennium when everybody was in chaos to think what will happen if the computers crash? The aeroplanes were going to crash and the trains would collide. That Show we are forced to think that one should not be dependent on these machines after all we are humans. We are here to command computers not them to order us.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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