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explain in detail of pie chart and give your opinion

explain in detail of pie chart and give your opinion
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The pie chart illustrates, why two
age
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 groups of
students
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Dorrifod
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for Dorrifod
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University
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. Data is calibrated in percentage.
Overall
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, the primary
reason
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 for both
the
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apply
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age
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 groups to opt
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this
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for this
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university
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because
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is because
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this
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 school was very close to their homes. But, the reputation of the teaching staff was
least
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the least
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 preferable
reason
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 for the
age
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group
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 18-24, in order to choose
this
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university
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.
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, for the
age
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group
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 25 and over, the opportunity to study abroad as part of the course was
least
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the least
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 preferable
reason
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 in order to study in Dorrifod. For the
age
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group
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 18-24, more than
two-
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two-thirds
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third
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students
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of students
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this
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university
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 because of the course they offered and close to their homes.
Additionally
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, for the
age
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 25 and over, their primary and secondary
reason
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 was
same
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the same
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that
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as that
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 of
other
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another age group
other age groups
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age
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group
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, but their
combine
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combined
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 percentage was 63. For the
age
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group
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 18-24, facilities on campus and the opportunity to study abroad as part of
course
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the course
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,
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a reason
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reason
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reasons
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 to opt
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this
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for this
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 school
was
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apply
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seven times and three times that of
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age
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the age
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group
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 25 and over. 12% and 20%,
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students
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of students
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 of
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age
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the age
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group
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 25 and over, take
this
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university
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 because of the reputation of teaching staff and their relations in the industry. But, only 6%,
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students
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of students
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 of
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age
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the age
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group
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 18-24, opted
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this
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for this
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university
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 because of the status of their teaching staff and industrial relations.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, students, university, reason, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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