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Some people believe that universities should offer places to young students with high marks. Other believe that people of all ages and with low grades should be allowed to study. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It has been an issue of debate that whether the
university
 offer admit to those young students, who got higher marks or they gave admission to pupils of all
age
 groups with low grades.
This
 essay will discuss both sides of the argument in detail and provide evidence as to why institutes gave admit to young students who got high percentage in their secondary classes. Some people believe that, courses that studied in institutes are more difficult and
also
 a teacher studied all topics in depth to the students. So, if they gave admission to those students who scored less marks in their previous study,
then
 it's difficult for them to pass the exam.
Additionally
, if they failed,
then
 they will include them in some criminal activity.
For example
, in the year 2016, according to Times News, 20% students in the academy, failed in their
first
 year because of the little basic knowledge of their subjects.
Therefore
, the college should give entry to young students those who performed very well in their school. On the opposite side, some people claim that, getting good tertiary
education
 from the reputed institute is the right of the individual and it does not depend upon the
age
 and grades that they score in their schools.
Secondly
,
institue
set up or lay the groundwork for
institute
 can not judge the ability of any student on the basis of marks they scored. For an instance, according to the New York Times, Canada is the only nation that provide
university
education
 to all
age
 group of pupils and
also
 give entry to those students who scored less marks.
Therefore
, if pupils of the nation are literate
then
 it's beneficial not only for the individual, but
also
 important for the nation too. In conclusion,
Although
 academy
education
 is beneficial for the growth of the individual of all
age
 groups, but in order to pass the
university
 exam and survive in
this
 competitive era, it's good for the student's if
university
 gave admission to those young students only who scored high marks. Notwithstanding, students who capable of affording
university
 courses, should not be profitable from national funding for
education
.

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