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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree and disagree?

#growth #shops #towns #cities
It is irrefutable fact that over the past few decades, technology has
effected
acted upon; influenced
affected
 every aspect of our life; shopping is one them. It is argued that
increasing popularity
Suggestion
the increasing popularity
 of
ecommerce
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eCommerce
 will obliterate the physical shopping. It is possible that most of the
brick
 and
mortar
 shops within town and city
perish
a local church community
parish
,
however
 customised and personal
product
 provision shop will sustain.
ecommerce
Suggestion
ECommerce
Commerce
Ecommerce
has affect
Suggestion
has affected
 the
business
 of almost every physical shop in towns and cities and some of them has already
perish
Suggestion
perished
.
For instance
, the Blockbuster, which was the world leading retailer for selling and renting
cds
Suggestion
CDs
/DVDs
for
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of
in
 the tv series, films, games and other entertainment products, has bankrupted because of the online streaming services. Bookshops are
also
 effected
sevierly
to a severe or serious degree
severely
 by
ecommerce
transactions (sales and purchases) having the objective of supplying commodities (goods and services)
commerce
.
few years
Suggestion
A few years
Few years
 ago There were three to four books shops almost in every
broadway
a street in Manhattan that passes through Times Square; famous for its theaters
Broadway
 high street or shopping mall,
however now
Accept comma addition
however, now
 it is very difficult to find the
brick
 and
mortar
 shop for books only.
Wsmith
someone who works at something specified
Smith
, which is the leading bookstore once, has
also
 changed its
business
 by selling grocery, food and drinks by reducing the book section within their stores. Almost every
business
 has adopted the
ecommerce
Suggestion
eCommerce
business
 model. All the giant
retail
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retailers
such
 as: Walmart,
Next Tesco
Accept comma addition
Next, Tesco
, Sainsburry, Morrison and many more
also
 sell products online. Considering the current trend, it can make you believe that
brick
 and
mortar
 shops
wil
the capability of conscious choice and decision and intention
will
 shut down one day,
however
 it may take some more decades to happen.
Although
 All those shops and stores which provide the ready made products are
effected
acted upon; influenced
affected
 by The online
business
, but personal shops
such
 as tailors for customised and personal suiting and clothing are
effected
acted upon; influenced
affected
 the least and will survive. A study by the London
Business
 School concluded that ready made
product
 provision businesses are almost
effected
acted upon; influenced
affected
 by 40% of their
business
 and personal
product
 provider only effected by 5% of their
business
 because of the
ecommerce
transactions (sales and purchases) having the objective of supplying commodities (goods and services)
commerce
eCommerce
.
Study
Suggestion
The study
 explains that
ecommerce
transactions (sales and purchases) having the objective of supplying commodities (goods and services)
commerce
 has less overhead and operational costs,
therefore
, it
offer
Suggestion
offers
the low
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the lowest
lower
 prices to their
customer
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customers
,
however
 personal
product
 buyer
do not care
Suggestion
does not care
 for price rather 100 percent satisfaction. In conclusion, low price and high variety of
products
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product
availability
Suggestion
available
 through online shopping can
wipeout
Suggestion
Wipeout
wipe out
 physical shopping in
few decades
Suggestion
few decades, however
the few decades however
the few decades the few decades however
a few decades however
however
 personal shopping will survive in
brick
 and
mortar
 shops.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • physical stores
  • online retailers
  • retail apocalypse
  • digital economy
  • consumer behavior
  • sustainability
  • commercial landscape
  • high-street
  • consumer trends
  • augmented reality
  • showrooms
  • carbon footprint
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