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Some people believe that protecting environment is the government responsibility. Others believe that every individual should take the responsibility for it . Discuss both views and give your opinion

#people #environment #government #responsibility
Few individuals think that
environment
 should be protected by the
government
;
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;
however
, many feel that responsibility should be taken by every person
.
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This
 essay will highlight both opinions and
also
 elaborate how
administration
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the administration
 and person play an equal role in maintaining the
environment
. In order to save the
environment some
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environment, some
 steps should be taken by
government
. They should apply rules and regulations and take strict actions against lawbreakers.
For instance
, Smoking
cigarette
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cigarettes
a cigarette
at
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in
 public places should be banned as it causes noise pollution
moreover
, factories should be moved to countryside because it creates
lot
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lots
 of waste material and destroy
cities atmosphere
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the city's atmosphere
city's atmosphere
city atmosphere
 due to which people who live in cities have suffered from many issues
.
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.
 With regards to the
environment
, every person should be
awared
(sometimes followed by 'of') having or showing knowledge or understanding or realization or perception
aware
 and should give their contribution as a part of the nation
.
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.
Firstly
,
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,
 They should keep their
environment
 neat and clean and avoid spreading waste on the public places.
Secondly
,
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,
 they should follow the law which was imposed by
government
for example
,
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,
few years
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a few years
 ago
,
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,
government
 launched one
law
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law, such
such
 as service your vehicles time to time because
pollution
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the pollution
 of vehicles causes a detrimental effect on the
environment
. In conclusi
on
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 , while
government
 shoul
d giv
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give
e
n contributi
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a contribution
on In term to save natu
re
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 , public is
also
 equally responsible for it
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