You have just read an article containing incorrect information about your town. Tell them about incorrect information and importance of correcting it.

I am writing to you regarding the

article

published about ABC

town

located near the Heston beach in your famous travel

magzine

a periodic publication containing pictures and stories and articles of interest to those who purchase it or subscribe to it

magazine

“The Travel”.

some

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Any

Some

incorrect

information

about

town

Suggestion

the town

is published in that

article

. I am

regular reader

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a regular reader

of “The Travel”

magzine

a periodic publication containing pictures and stories and articles of interest to those who purchase it or subscribe to it

magazine

, which publish very useful

information

about different holiday destination and

adventures

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adventure

places for tourists. I came across an

article

about my

town

. At

first

, I was very delighted to see the

article

about my

town

however

Accept comma addition

however, this

this

pleasure did not

last

long as I found out

many

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much

incorrect

informations

a message received and understood

information

First

, the

berief

of short duration or distance

brief

history that

provide

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provides

its built dates are wrong. The

article

mentioned

town

built in 1657 by John Merchant,

instead

it was

actualy

in actual fact

actually

built in 1757 by John Merchant.

Second

, the pictures of different buildings are not located in

this

town

rather

this

town

, which is 5

mile

Suggestion

miles

away. “The Travel”

magzine

a periodic publication containing pictures and stories and articles of interest to those who purchase it or subscribe to it

magazine

is well reputed

magzine

a periodic publication containing pictures and stories and articles of interest to those who purchase it or subscribe to it

magazine

magazines

in print media and people use it as

tour guide

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a tour guide

Therefore

, It is very important to publish 100 percent true

information

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my suggestion, if you

can not

cannot

publish the same

article

with correct

information

then

at least an editorial note should be published. Looking for your kind regards, Your faithfully, BAC ABC

town

, north ireland

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
18Grammar mistakes
 

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207 words

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Accurate linking words

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

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Relevant & specific examples

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